“The wrench collided with the weightless sandwich.”
I rarely try to write comedy. I think it is the most pressured kind of writing to attempt. It can be very easy to fail at it, and when you do fail, it is very obvious that you have. In fact, The Forcefield is the first piece of writing I have ever put out for public consumption which has a deliberate comedic element.
Check it out in my Prose section and let me know how far from the mark you think it falls!